Dear readers,
I recently challenged the members of my daily haiku meme Carpe Diem Haiku Kai to write a choka, a Japanese long poem. Of course I have given it a try myself. To start this first time choka ever I have used a haiku, which I composed using baransu.
the cooing of pigeons
resonates through the gray streets –
ah! that summer rain
refreshes the dried out earth
filling its scars
the perfume of earth tickles
my nostrils
after the hot summer days
I dance in the rain
naked on the top of the hills
I feel free at last
nature around me comes to life
field flowers bloom
I see their beautiful colors
the perfume of Honeysuckle
ah! that summer rain
the perfume of the moist soil
tickles my senses
I lay down, naked in her arms
surrounded by Honeysuckle
© Chèvrefeuille
I wasn’t easy to compose this choka. I had never done this before, and I don’t know if I succeeded, but I like this choka a lot. Maybe, I have to try choka more often … or will this be my only, once in a life time, choka?
See you, have a nice week.
I hope you write more – this was… beautiful and inspiring
I will try to write more choka it’s a nice form of poetry.
Lovely!
Thanks
This is so very beautiful!!… 🙂
You make me blush.
Keep writing choka! It is lovely, especially the ending – such joy!
Thanks … I will give it a thought. I like choka, but its not really my “cup of tea” to compose long poems.
Always fun to try new forms
Wow, Chevrefeuille! It’s beautifully sensual with wonderful imagery. 🙂
Thank you Jen.
Very welcome 🙂
Ah Chèvrefeuille you certainly succeeded and in a big way … a wonderful choka … and a beautiful story. I agree with Moondustwriter, I hope you write more! 😉
You are making me blush Georgia. I have to try choka more often.
Wow … I never imagined I could make you blush but if it means you’ll try choka again … hope all is going well with your father , I think that I can say that we’re all thinking of you and your family.
Thanks Georgia … and I will try to compose choka more often.
🙂 thanks to you!
wonderful……write more
I think we should all write more choka. Pleased you tackled this form and look forward to reading a lot more from you. The last tanka is beautiful.
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